Then, with an eager expression, he'd tell her "open wide, here comes the choo-choo!"

"The flickering light thrown by the candles in their room would advance like a sunrise into the dark tunnel between her thighs as she drew back the snug skirt."

Holding the Cards -- Joey W. Hill

Comments

[Matt]

Consider a writer, trying to create a romance novel that will be read by sexstarved and bored women across the globe. Now, consider us, we who critique the work of thsoe writers.. here... in the Twilight Zone!

Submitted for your approval, one Joey W. Hill, a man who refers to female genitalia as "dark tunnel" and is certain that reading this will incite passionate thoughts in his readers.
Little does he know that his prose has taken a side trip into the Twilight Zone..

[The Wife]

Unless the author has created a fake persona to go along with a pen name, Joey W. Hill is a woman. The book (short story, really) wasn't all that bad. There were some pretty bad quotes in it, and it seems clear to me that her BDSM experience is from a researcher's perspective, not a practical perspective ("borrowing" someone else's sex toys, without asking, and without cleaning them before or after? Ew), but the story was still interesting and it was, for the MOST part, well written. Unfortunately, there were a lot of info-dumps that broke up what would otherwise have been hot scenes, and there was a bit too much of a 180 on the "I'm uncomfortable with another man touching my body in a non-sexual way" to a "let's have butt sex!" (in a single afternoon no less). But I'll probably read more of her writing. The problem is that it's very hard to get GOOD BDSM work. There's more to it than spanking, people. Not to mention that not everything needs to be broken down into its psychological components. Sometimes you just don't care why something is hot.